I left my house and I crossed the street, it was very cold so I put my jacket on. I walked down the road looking back for a bus but couldn’t see on so I turned back and kept I walking. I came to a food store and I could smell the fresh warm croissants, I felt hungry. I crossed the street again and came to a cross road, so I waited for the vehicles to stop and it got colder so I done up my jacker. I crossed two roads when the vehicles stopped and came to a straight. I walked about a third of a mile till I came to my school.
January 19, 2015 at 2:35 pm
This is almost a perfect example of a descriptive ‘framework’, where you have all the events and thoughts – now what it needs is the introduction of sensory description (smell, sound, taste etc) and possibly some figurative language too. I look forward to working on this descriptive writing project with you.
CW